In this story she relates herself to a buzzard. Not only does she do that she also pity's herself throughout the story. When the two mixed it annoyed and pushed me away. There is a different way of writing to where she could have gotten her point across. She focused this essay on all about her. Everything she did she thought she did right but was never good enough for her father. It was just really depressing and slow. Maybe, if she would have compared herself to something other than a buzzard, the essay would have been more entertaining to read.
If I were to have to compare myslef to something, I definitely would compare it to something readers would like to hear about. Maybe something pleasant, such as a flower. Flowers don't always have to be good objects either, they shrink up and die. In my story, such as in
Buzzards, if I were going to relate myself to something bad, I could still do that through a pleasant object. This way, readers aren't so annoyed and will want to continue to read the passage. My point being that writer of Buzzards could have simply compared or contrast herself to something more intriguing than a nasty bird.
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